Review Detail of TheFilthyRhymer in Eternal Quest: Chronicles of the Virtual Realm

Fantastic first three chapters! No problem with the flow of the sentences, good job on that! One thing lacking was the depths of emotions. Instead of just saying this character was enthralled by the beauty of this view, how about showing it how? Like he reaches for the sky seemingly bewitched by the grand sky. Something like that, overall. Great work bro :)