JL_567
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A MTF Author with romance on the mind
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JL_56730minCommented"Me? Oh, I'm nothing you've ever met before. But I'm something you'll never forget, I'll make sure of it. Welcome to Earth. There are no Gods no this miserable mudball and if they were, They'd be called Humanity." Peter answered simply.- JL_56711dCommentedCh 47 Battle of New York Part 2
- JL_56730dCommentedCh 46 Battle of New York Part 1(Edited)
- JL_5671mthCommentedCh 45 Attack on Hero Part 12
- JL_5671mthCommentedBlack widows' martial skill further boosted by her enhanced physic with her gadgets and when equipped with her custom built twin taran tactical STI Combat Master which had extended mags just for this occasion nothing was left to chance. She was dressed in her shield issued flexible armored suit, the materials were slick light and were made with specialized threads that were akin to titanium, all weaved into perfection by shields tech heads. She took them out with lethal precision and speed, while captain America provided support and drew the swarms fire with his trusty shield, tossing it and catching it at impossible speeds by bouncing it from even more impossible angles.
- JL_5671mthReplied to JL_567
Also maybe "swarm like flies"
The bustling city of New York looked not different than an active war zone as countless armored monsters swarmed out of the literal hole in the sky. Explosions painted the sky with fire and smoke as lighting struck down with the wrath of a god targeting the swarm charring anything foolish enough to exit the portal a charred ashen black as electricity crackled all over their farm. The alien feels like flies, a few leviathans and countless foot soldiers dropped from the sky crashing into the city below. - JL_5671mthCommented
I think no different might work better here
The bustling city of New York looked not different than an active war zone as countless armored monsters swarmed out of the literal hole in the sky. Explosions painted the sky with fire and smoke as lighting struck down with the wrath of a god targeting the swarm charring anything foolish enough to exit the portal a charred ashen black as electricity crackled all over their farm. The alien feels like flies, a few leviathans and countless foot soldiers dropped from the sky crashing into the city below. - JL_5671mthCommentedCh 44 Attack on Hero Part 11
- JL_5671mthReplied to Kelvin_Soarer
Vertical take off and landing. Examples being the F-35B, AV-8 Harrier, and perhaps more applicable being something like the V-22 osprey or the more modern V-280 Valor. Essentially I'm asking if it's a plane that can land like a helicopter or if they somehow made it to an airbase
A fellow soldier passed his gun to another and then, he placed Katelyn on his back. The group of soldiers ran out of the enemy fortress. Dean picked up his radio and sent a message to the air force, revealing their location to them. The Air Force responded quickly by sending a plane to the given location. - JL_5671mthReplied to Kelvin_Soarer
Of course, I just like to nerd out a bit
"The longer you're here, the more you endanger everyone! Quick! Leave!" Ryan scowled at Dean. - JL_5671mthCommentedCh 43 Attack on Hero Part 10
- JL_5671mthCommented" GAS, GAS, GAS! THE BELKANS BROKE THE GENEVA CONVENTION! THEY BROKE THE CONVENTION!" Having relived the traumatic experience from a war long gone, the Ustian Commander hysterically screams on the radio, inflicting widespread panic among the Ustian soldiers.
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Interesting to see if the author does something about him broadcasting his thoughts of meta data rather then attempting to lock it down
'Kitty is pretty friendly, she is the girl that can phase through things. I think her intelligence is supposed to be pretty high too.' Peter thought as he refreshed his memory to the possible new classmate. - JL_5671mthCommentedCh 42 Attack on Hero Part 9
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Hmm I'm not sure, this seems a little too villain monology for what we've seen
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I think "two of the strongest attackers" would fit better here
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Hmm... Rainbow crystal... Illum..
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Dude woke up as a lazy frmcel let's goooo
Looking around, the woman had no idea where she was. She looked at her surroundings in confusion, shock, and disbelief, all while thinking to herself, 'Where the hell am I? This isn't English class...' - JL_5671mthCommentedRight beneath the spider was a sleeping young woman with long, raven-black hair that covered most of her face. From her neck down, there was a dark blue blanket that hid most of her body. Surrounding the bed were numerous plates of moldy food and empty or half-filled soda cans.
- JL_5671mthReplied to Hayden_W4lker