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I am sure this guy was weirded out for a second
should've thrown that coffee at him
disbelief should be running through Ayana's head right now
a small correction: 'a staff' instead of 'an staff'
So the Characters are fleshed out. That is the first thing, aside from that I have always been intrigued by the idea of making potions and how do they work. There is however a couple of changes I would recommend. The first is to cut down big paragraphs which makes it harder to read. The second is to not use pronouns excessively. Apart from that, I don't see many issues with this. Great writing!
time travel?
I mean...this hooded person feels like the one who killed that mermaid you know...they also say what they have is borrowed
the mermaid?
this woman strong
what they are doing is taking law into their hands...
Time to GTFO!!!!
I mean...checking all skills he has is necessary you know...what if he gets into some trouble and needs a skill
yup