I'm looking for new horizons as a writer. And that's all you'll get from me.
Criticism based on my observations (objectivity first and foremost). This story so far exudes presumption - and in spades! I mean, the play is well written. Fantastically well, in fact. Commendable. But as alternative as "this" MCU of yours is, dear author. Mixing DC mobs characters ( the Ducard that one) in the MCU is too risky. And when you add the mystery of each chapter ending to the mix. Well, this gets messy. It's as if the MC's life (character the reader identifies with) is out of his hands. Man, that borders on sadism, truth be told. Or the thing about wishes and gods watching during the prologue. All as a casual office roll. That was the funniest joke of the day, honestly. The only salvageable thing about this whole mess called fanfiction, aside from good writing, are the excellent portrayals of MJ, the Osborn kid and finally Bernard. Nothing else to say. Anyone who seeks to contradict this is only fooling themselves or is a masochist like the MC. One of two. Hahaha.
The mc is not a genius. Nor is it easy to distinguish the nuances of a caricature. Finally, the mc was supposed to be depressed. He is not a cold person like other mc's who magically know everything around them. I am very sorry for having confused you with my bad grammar. I will try to improve.