Really not liking this fixation on some stupid eyes that are pretty limited in use. Seriously other than the special abilities of the mangekyou, susanoo, and the regular sight abilities of the sharingan in base form, they have no use. Plus they are so widely known that it's a blaring red target for anyone in the know. To make it worse is the blindness risk. Ultimately this is the actions of a coward that doesn't even have the patience to train. Physical training is useless because it's just a clone, but training in magic versatility to replicate the ninjutsu abilities using his energy is not useless.

How can she brush her fingers against his when they aren't near each other and he tossed the bag?

At this point the story deserves a glowing five stars because of how much it's bringing me laughter and joy.

Your story is so funny I would have missed my bus stop, if I had not remembered that I should pay attention.

I want to laugh so hard right now. But I'm outside in public.

You are doing so well that I can't stop laughing at the antics happening.

You use the word "and" too much and in places it shouldn't be. Don't start sentences with "and". Other than that I don't see any major problems with the grammar.

Why does it seem like the grammar got worse after the first chapter?

You are killing me with laughter. My stomach is starting to hurt.

He created the chat group system through his portion. That's pretty unique. Haven't seen that before.

The Shadow clone jutsu only transfers back the MENTAL experiences, not the physical. So the only thing you could train is jutsu and intelligence related things. Any physical training is wasted.

So basically a combination of doflamingo, sasori of the red sands, and then kakuzu? He has the thread abilities of doflamingo, he will become a puppeteer with a multitude of strong puppets like sasori, and he will have multiple "hearts"(devil fruits) to give him extra abilities but in the form of separate entities like kakuzu. Seems actually pretty cool.

I love it. Especially the "range:YES". that got a good laugh out of me.

I'm not happy. I can't be expected to be happy when a bunch of crybabies going wah wah woe is me harms a child and gets what equates to a slap on the wrist. They literally cut her up so much that she was covered in bleeding wounds, while sealing her in a place that kills everything that enters and can't naturally survive it. And to make it worse is they were a bunch of hypocritical idiots that teamed up with the same species that caused their problems. And then the final cherry on top is they were going to destroy the world out of some idiotic thought that some regular dragon slaying liquid could harm great red, and then they would even be able to get close enough to cause said harm. And in the process of all this they would also enslave an innocent mother to essentially kill herself and her child by allowing this to happen or be killed by them anyway.

Was that stan Lee?

Conqueror's Haki is a rare form of Haki that cannot be attained through training. Only one in several million people have this ability. This type of Haki allows the user to exert their willpower over others. It is said that whoever possesses this type of Haki has the qualities of a king.

I think you should word this differently. instead of "her ears dropped to cover her ears" you could put something like "her ears drooped down to hide themselves", or "her ears drooped down into her hair to hide".

DC, Marvel, AND worm? This world is so screwed and Mikael is the only thing that just MIGHT be able to help.

Are you turning Izuku into a mixture of toji and the joker? Cause it kinda seems that way.

Hiruzen already told them about him being the jinchuriki, so you kinda made a plot hole by acting like Itachi didn't know and ask a question that was already answered when he asked the first time.