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Geneva Suggestions

loser: not the winner looser: not tight. [example] your mom is *looser* than I thought she would be...

so his idea to rid the world of inequality is to create the biggest disparity in power the world has ever seen and kill everyone who disagrees with him? I really hate stupid, idealistic MCs.

so Owen has been downgraded to Gold tier again for like the 6th time. poor guy is a peak diamond tier that can play with master tier entities and his author can't seem to even get that much right. poor MC

first thing I do when I start a new book is look at the reviews. all the ones posted by level 1 accounts are automatically ignored since we all know they are clone accounts of the author. next I unlock the first paywall chapter and check the comments section. if there are no comments then it means the author could not hold an audience. after that I look at the ticket and powerstone votes. even if all of those three things turn me away I will still give your story a chance as long as the chapter price is reasonable. 15 coins per chapter on a book with no legit ratings, no votes, and no paywall comments is not reasonable.

and because you failed to do the right thing you have lost the trust and support of MY FACTION. queen or not, goddess or not the MC right now holds all the cards and is instead being a pushover. this is just sad.

I can understand why nobody has read this past the 20th chapter.

who is Nessa?

20 chapters in and the whole thing is raw ideas put to text with no form or purpose. the base of the story is unique but the run on sentences thar stray off in every direction make it really hard to read.

Just a word of advice to all those thinking of or in the process of being a writer. use of the word "and" is a missed opportunity to really bring out the imagery giving more depth to your characters and worldscape.

I can tell that the writer has a good story in their head. I just hope their writing skills develope quickly along the way.

dude... a full chapter about driving a coach from the main gate to the palace. the amount of filler here is painful!

This story starts off strong but it's almost like a different person wrote the first 20ish chapters. After that point it's poor character development, one dimensional thinking and half the time the author forgets which character and what persona of that character he is writing about! confusing the names of the side characters making it really hard to keep track of everything that is going on. If it was 5 coins a chapter I would say "go for it" but at 15ish coins a chapter you are better off saving your money for an author who is actually putting in the time and effort to build a quality storyline.

It's not a bad start. I like that the MC has been building himself since he set foot on the new world instead of the basic "starter town" we get from most works.this work might actually amount to something I'll read all the way through. keep up the good work Taosnothing!

Yeah, I can already see that this is not my type of thing so with respect, I'm out.

I feel like that skull was trapped with some high level illusion spell or some kind of slave spell.

The white powdery substance that collects on the husk of grapes is yeast. when you make wine through the old method you don't need to add it. it will ferment on its own.you only add yeast if the natural yeast dies or you are using processed grapes and juices. mead on the other hand requires it.

so much for 10 minutes. that 300 word filler has been here for over 24 hours.