SilentMan
Madness, Disorder, Mayhem, Havoc, Turmoil, Anarchy, Lawlessness, CHAOS!
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I liked the story and concept and that is why I'm giving 5 stars(I'm also a fan of Lotm). But the first chapter was so off putting and unnecessary. Even without it, everything would've been fine, No, much better. The reason? 1)First of all, what is the point of building up a story to a point where people already know the ending? It spoils everything especially when you are experimenting in the Lovecraftian genre. Lovers of this genre like mysteries, foreshadowing, etc... not just straight up-Look Mc's gonna become an OP god and crush these people of this region. You get the gist right? 2)The first chap gave me a polished chinese cultivation trash vibes. Gods not acting like Gods but instead shout like children... How can these people be like: "Oh my gawd, How did he do that?" "What? So powerful? "Kyaaa!!!!" Yeah... If MC can be powerful and OP then so should the characters at a similar level be but they feel too weak. Most of my complaints are regarding the first chapter, apart from that I feel everything is great. Just remove the first chap if possible, after all, I don't think it provides anything to the story except spoilers lmao. Love you for writing this :)
Wait. Sister's out as well?
So something similar to Dual Cultivation? Su Yang also had zero morals after being reborn, even though his memories weren't unlocked... He f*cked on just instincts ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
Ahh man of culture~ Pagma's Sword Dance- [KILL]!
Reverend Insanity. Dude are you living under a rock?
*Proceeds to shed a few tears* *Sniff* *Sniff* "Masterpiece."
Yes Hard! Very Hard... Why is my mind always inside the gutter?
"Good-looking people underestimate themselves; Ugly people think they are attractive!"
I can't believe there is no "Jade-Skin" and "Eyes like Water". So disappointing...😂
Holding hands is too lewd. >_<
Axiom doesn't have any missing pair of organs. He is a healthy adult man(only physically, mentally he is broken) but infertile due to other complications...which might be related to his past. Since the era I am writing about is technologically advanced with magic there might some fixes... We'll see about that. That is all I can say for now. :)
I don't remember not explaining each word like you say. Most words could be found in Eastern Fantasy Chinese cultivation novels. If you are not familiar with them, then you would obviously feel uncomfortable reading the book(qi, dantian, navel center).As per your comment on first chapter( I noticed your comment, and it is quite obvious you have read only 1 chapter), I still have no words to explain how I feel when I have explained every word in it and the meaning behind it. Like 'Chakra'(for example), it means wheel and it is mentioned there, Like Prana(for example), it is Soul and it is also mentioned there. If you don't know what Yoga is then you are quite dumb tbh. That's all, there are hardly any other words in first chapter that may ruin your reading experience this much that you drop a 1 star right after reading the First Chapter. I won't delete this review and I also hope you won't so that other readers who come here can clearly see your stupidity, especially when you judge the entire 30 chapters from 1 chapter.. Sighs~ Thank you for reading.
*Spoiler* Read at your own risk! . . . . . . . . Yes someone is watching. He made a terrible mistake.