Sporanium
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For the POV, you can make it like this whole chapter is from James and the next chapter is from the other perspective. So you don't need to mention who is the POV currently. Each character has a characteristic, use that to your advantage for the reader to be aware that if you mentioned that certain characteristic they will know who it was. I can't comment on how you should do to the story pace because it's just my preference, so it's better to think about it yourself [img=recommend]
Kinda unexpected
Ooh, a half-angle
The way the author write is kinda unique, using himself as a narrator and describing the situation work. But it's confusing on it's own, the way the author use punctuation is a mess. And too much "tell" that make it bland. But the story was good, the concept of revenge are neatly arranged with nerdy past of mc. Overall, it's decent to read.
Kinda wondered, who's liver Zuhaib pull?