Review Detail of Sporanium in Justice And Desire
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The story development is too slow, and the point-out pov was too much annoying from my point of view. But the character development, I feel like the character inside was a real person. The dialogue is surreal and it's comfortable to read. Kudos to the author! Keep up the good work!
Justice And Desire
Jenival_Enyia
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For the POV, you can make it like this whole chapter is from James and the next chapter is from the other perspective. So you don't need to mention who is the POV currently. Each character has a characteristic, use that to your advantage for the reader to be aware that if you mentioned that certain characteristic they will know who it was. I can't comment on how you should do to the story pace because it's just my preference, so it's better to think about it yourself [img=recommend]
Jenival_Enyia:Thank you, dear. So what are you suggesting I do about the point-out POV? And how do you suggest I speed up the pace of the story? Also, what pace do you believe would be better?
I like this. I will take all you've said into consideration and work on it. Thank you so much, honey, for taking the time to write this. You are a gem. ❤
Sporanium:For the POV, you can make it like this whole chapter is from James and the next chapter is from the other perspective. So you don't need to mention who is the POV currently. Each character has a characteristic, use that to your advantage for the reader to be aware that if you mentioned that certain characteristic they will know who it was. I can't comment on how you should do to the story pace because it's just my preference, so it's better to think about it yourself [img=recommend]