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The synopsis wasn't quite that good but I'm hoping that the author could make it more interesting. But so far it's good, I kinda liked how you expresses the relationship with her father on the first to second part. So that's all, hope the author will improve him/her writing skills even more. Keep writing❣️
As I have read the first chapter, I can say that it's damn scary! The flow of the story was good but it's kinda confusing like what you have said in the synopsis. Though it could be even better if you have put the proper quotation like (" ") and (.) 'coz their dialogue were getting lost. The readers might not have notice that the characters were already saying their lines. So as I have said, make it clear as much as possible. There were also some wrong spelling but it's fine tho. Overall it was good, that's all! Hope this feedback will help you improve your writing. Keep writing author!❤️