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Moduo_Ren10dCommentedCh 51 Chapter 51: Funeral- Moduo_Ren11dCommentedCh 50 Chapter 50: Tremor-Tremor Fruit
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- Moduo_Ren13dCommentedCh 48 Chapter 48: Incomplete Domain
- Moduo_Ren14dCommentedCh 47 Chapter 47: Haru Vs Admiral Kizaru
- Moduo_Ren15dCommentedCh 46 Change 46: Paramount War
- Moduo_Ren16dCommentedCh 45 Chapter 45: Health Check Up
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- Moduo_Ren17dCommentedCh 44 Chapter 44: Little Enterprise
- Moduo_Ren1mthCommentedCh 64 Why are you...?
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Do your thing chef
I know what you're thinking... But trust the process. Let me cook. - Moduo_Ren1mthReplied to BlackWinter_186
only after the 3rd years graduates, he'll be swimming in dough after that
At the end of the day, a dropout has to be selected. - Moduo_Ren1mthCommentedCh 28 Chapter 27: *Title at the bottom*
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is it just me or is this chapter the same as the last one?
Chapter 16: Vacation in Another World! - Moduo_Ren2mthCommentedMeanwhile, the male Magikarp had a dragon affinity, so chances were high that Ryujin was the dad. Still, on this side, the chance was there that it was Magidraco's kid, or that it was a coincidence based on the same reasoning as with the poison one.
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Ice Gae Bolg
(Let me know if you have any ideas for the MC elemental burst, thank you) - Moduo_Ren4mthCommented
Your paragraphs are kinda long, I don't mind it much, but others might take one look at it and drop the story then and there. Splitting it up into smaller paragraphs will make it easier to read.Also, try to separate the dialogues and narration texts, and maybe add some indicators on who is saying what. If it's a back and forth conversation, it's fine without any indications, but in some situations one character may need to speak twice or thrice in a row with some pausing.That's all, I'm liking the story so far. Keep it up!
This paragraph has been deleted. - Moduo_Ren4mthReplied to Shadow_Dragon_9805
j how big
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