nephalem of gremory on fanfiction

its on fanfiction . net same title

im assuming you simply stole this from others who to have stolen this work from fanfiction dot net if only i could simply report it and move on no one should read this novel hell the originial isnt even being finished

you have a decent start here i truly enjoy the way hes a happy person with dark magic

have you thought of idk not making the MC go through EXACTLY THE SAME SHIT AS PERCY JACKSON. i mean he has foreknowledge of the events happening but you make him go through the same shit almost verbatim where the plot is concerned hell you make it seem like he doesnt know whats happening. if i wanted to read percy Jackson id read the actual book. this a fanfic if your a fan of the book you should already have changes that youd make to the story.

i meant more along the lines of fire arms training and such at a beginner level but i understand what you mean to let it flow. as I'm not writing it and not sure of your vision for the story i can only make suggestions

i gave 5 simply for it being a Wick fic ive been looking for them recently pretty decent overall. I'd advise giving him some training soon or something because pwople wont want to stick around to long for a weak protag in that kind of world.

ideas 1 have him become an apprentice of flitwick and become a dueling champion with his girls 2 have him meet with andromeda before school for a solicitor to free sirius this lines up 2 girls rose potter and nymphadora 3 have grindewald reach out through blood magic and teach him of his heritage 4 have him cancel black marriage contracts for cissy and bella and take cissy back into the family as she is untouched as luci has never touched her draco is a result of a ritual 5 have him begin destruction of the horcruxes 6 make him the leader of the grey faction and fight Dumbledore and voldie you know kinda like dumbles is well meaning but senile and afraid of his past with gellert

change the title of this story hes not a saiyan for longer then like 3 hapters including when you made him part namekian not to mention you are throwing more and more shit into the story with cthulu and adding more worlds with solo leveling and whatever else.

honestly this is one of the better grimm books ive come across you should take your time and actually incorporate your character into the story it seems more like an outside character jumping in from time to time and not actually a part of the story line

should definitely make the other inmates watch the punishment

its hard to find good OC or SI fanfics of percy jackson that are actually long enough to enjoy. most authors drop them after like 15-20 chapters.

artemis or zoe hell can even do hestia

artemis

should do Artemis it is ancient Greece before her man hating ways

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i dont get why everyone seems to be upset about the MC having a relationship with women who also are in a relationship. its not really cucking like they claim it to be its simply a polyamorous relationship? besides most men would kill for multiple women to sleep with them at the same time like in the novel. they act like its some big deal when its really not. considering the bar keep is millennia old his views on these things are obviously different.

wonder if itll ever be finished

what was wish 2????

i mean with just a couple wishes all the issues could be solved instant mastery energy manipulation to be the strongest being in the universe and wish his family to never be harmed in any way and thats just the easiest way to do things with different wordings you can change everything