Leonardo_Black
Writing
of reading
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Read books
*Thick* instead of think
if he was *part* of
life *before* coming
Fix - ...the true name of...
Typo - Should be Irulan
Typo - Should be Irulan
Typo - Should be Irulan
you're the strongest here..
What you meant is that there are people now working in VR games, doing things that none did before, right? I suggest " a new line of work" or "a new kind of profession", something like that.
I suggest changing "actual" for "current"
pull >> full
change "I" for "and", right?
is it days? or hours?
that is ok. no worries. keep writing when you can.
that is cool. I was just pointing them out if you want to correct them you want me to stop? I like your story a lot
mead >> meat
your >> you're