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true, which is weird that they say he's untalented.
Indeed as there were many opportunities he could have used to mend the relationship between the village and the clan
that's such a ridicules amount that should be impossible, I believe ten million bomb tags would cave a mountain let alone 600 billion bomb tags
why there specifically?
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he's ten and already injecting himself with serum and blocking ten tail biju. This fic's logic is fried, if he's was 19 or even 15 than sure but 10.
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Word, like aren't they considered elites?
Especially geniuses who might I add, are children. Like what are they gonna do, shift the war in konaha's favor LOL.
Might be due to the chakra input being low which caused the damage output to also be low as well.
True but that depends if you could find all seven dragon balls.
now while he did assert himself as Hokage, the fact that danzo was left with no repercussion from the Hokage shows others how weak his authority, which is bad for someone of his standing if he wants to continue being Hokage.
it does in fact matter, as there are many beings who could attack within a second in the Naruto verse, especially if their ambushing him with some idea of his abilities beforehand. unlike OG garou, he has family that is known to both enemies and allies who could and will play him like a fiddle unless author makes them dumb or ignorant which is unlike for people like the third hoekage and people with authority.
My Brotha in Allah you got to stop using the "Name: dialogue" tamplate when making an interaction cuz it leaves much to be desired and is hella CRINGE for my literacy ball sack and it has endured even MTL Chinese nationalistic CCP aka BBC bullshit novel fanfics. The best way to make an interaction is to write the dialogue than put the name of person who said it with either an frown, anger or anything to showcase extra details of the character (" dialogue" said brian with a stern tone behind his voice OR "dialogue" a frowning brian appeared behind the tree with his index and thumb grasping his chin.) just be creative with it. Also the best way to do world building is through dialogue, DIALOGUE aka interaction with and between characters THAT MATCHES THEIR SETTING (sir Johnson, son of Jon, to the house of Jreald, is a grand ranked knight who is both polite and well mannered to anyone regardless of status or race, but don't let that fool you as he has shown the willingness to exhibit extreme prejudice towards those he deem enemies and evil with his sword as seen in battle of narmguirde fortress) There also huge amounts of details you could add in between the dialogue and the actions of the characters when doing anything (walking, seeing, noticing, etc) that what really makes the story worth reading especially in combat scenes where the combatants are shown their techniques not just through names BUT through details of how there techniques look (example, the "Rock smashing fist" Jons hands form into a fists, with his left fist near his left hip and his right fist moved at a blur to bury itself in the abdomen of knight of the Dradon) and mentioning the area and how it looks from the prospecting of an Main Character is important as it gives depth to the STORY and the world that's occurring around it. Anyways my bad, I want on a giant tangent. to get a good idea of what am talking about, read the novel 'I become a pope, now what?' it's pretty good and has displayed everything that I said with great success that makes me want to Nut, yes you read it right NUT, N.U.T. the thing that comes out every Man BA-- anyways that's enough yapping, have a good one. Writing Quality is ass due to the reasons above However the grammer is good (so 2 stars ) Stability of Updates pretty good 100 chapters in 4 months it's good(5 stars) Story Development- not sure where the story is going at some points as there just traveling and ceasing mass mayhem which is fine but it doesn't really follow Yhwach character as i thought he would build his civilization by freeing some suffering people or A.I's that are used for nothing more that to please their human masters that becomes his empire to conquer the stars and than other universes but this is the authors novel not mine. (3 stars) Character Design-the MC and the world setting Design already exist as it's matter of shaping it to create a story and plot plus Yhwach is a cool Character ( 5 stars) World Background - due to the vague use of words and lack of them to describe the Main Character surroundings beyond the pre-established setting( never-the-less it's a fanfic so 3 stars) An amazing story promise with great potential but poor execution.
brotha you got to stop using the "Name: dialogue" tamplate when making an interaction cuz it leaves much to be desired. The best way to make an interaction is to write the dialogue than put the name of person who said it with either an frown, anger or anything to showcase extra details of the character (" dialogue" said brian with a stern tone behind his voice OR "dialogue" a frowning brian appeared behind the tree with his index and thumb grasping his chin.) just be creative with it. Also the best way to do world building is through dialogue, DIALOGUE aka interaction with and between characters THAT MATCHES THEIR SETTING (sir Johnson, son of Jon, to the house of Jreald, is a rank grand knight who is polite and well mannered to anyone regardless of position or race, but don't let that fool you as he has shown the willingness to exhibit extreme prejudice towards those he deem enemies and evil with his sword as seen in battle of narmguirde fortress) there also huge amounts of details you could add in between the dialogue and the actions of the characters when doing anything(walking, seeing, noticing, etc) that what really makes the story worth reading especially in combat scenes where the combatants are shown their techniques not just through names BUT through details of how there techniques look (example, the "Rock smashing fist" Jons hands form into a fists, with his left fist near his left hip and his right fist moved at a blur to bury itself in the abdomen of knight of the Dradon) Anyways my bad, I want on a giant tangent. for what am talking about read 'I become a pope, now what?' it's pretty good and has displayed everything that I said with great success that makes me what to Nut, yes you read it right NUT, N.U.T. the thing that comes out every Man BA-- anyways that's enough yapping, have a good one.