porque las rosas son rojas?

es algo típico de la basura china, existen buenas referencias de buenas novelas pero no sé porque siempre usan los clichés más malos

friend, the story was going well, but you asked me when you started to want to clear the third party's name, it's bullshit, there are no excuses about old people, and he's a shinobi, a fucking ninja, and he won't know what's happening to Naruto, it's kind of incoherent. and taken out of the sleeve.

It's a very confusing thing to read, and the truth is that it feels like you're jumping from one place to another with the story. I think it would be good that you will improve the timeline of the story.

very good story, the incorporation of the worlds does not feel so forced. Just one question, what plans do you have for the original male leads...? but thanks for such a good story

excellent way to tell a good story, it feels more realistic to expect that from demons, not all demons are like gremory and that was excellent, only with the ones from the visions you had some problems when adding it but fine as far as I'm concerned. thanks for a good story, it would be nice to make the chapters longer but thanks

It's incredible, the only thing that bothers and/or cuts off the flow of the story is the time jumps, but everything else is incredible. The character is fresh and realistic, very good work and keep it up, congratulations

I don't feel that what made dxd what it is is that it was echi no hentai and in fanfic they go a lot towards hentai. Yes it is good but in the end it ends up as porn with a plot or porn with a lot of plot, I think that at the beginning you were going very well but I feel that little by little you are leaning more towards that abyss.... but if the concept and the writing are good, congratulations

I tried to give it a chance, but there are so many problems that I might as well give up. I say it's okay to try but I think you only asked an AI to write the story for you and you didn't edit it, I don't know if that was the case but if so it's better to clarify it and read with that mentality

I gave him a chance and the truth is he disappointed me, the guy grew up in shit, he doesn't have to put up with so much shit that the Loki family gives him... if your intention is for him to act like a fucking kid, put those rebellious thoughts in motion, don't put up with so much shit with crying. He has the fucking dark side of the force, he is an incarnation of fucking chaos, he is not here to endure.... but hey, I know. luck

very difficult to read, it feels like you have attention deficit, those POV jumps ruin everything and I'm not an unconditional fan of the franchise but everything feels very forced.... the idea is good but you didn't know how to take advantage of it, good luck

well, I think I'll leave it here, it was good while it lasted, but I don't like the way you're doing these last few episodes, so I wish you the best and thank you for everything, see you

The truth is, I didn't bother finishing reading the first chapter, the synopsis caught my attention but I think... I don't think I'm an expert or anything, it's just advice that you want to try to start the story in another way, I don't know, but good luck.

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congratulations, excellent story although I feel a little worried if you can keep the story I hope I'm wrong and that you achieve a story that can grow and gain the recognition you deserve

Most people in the world live, are born and die in that dark forest. Not everyone does well in life, there are always people who do poorly... sigh, that's life, that's how you enjoy the small glimpses of clarity in the forest

Come on man, if you don't know how to continue the story, take some time, but don't add filler just to fulfill your wet dreams, you're starting to get carried away by the story and that's it.

Si alguien puede crear un fan fic con esta idea me gustaría leerlos, crédito a chatgpt y saludos

Tired of reading this novel, I wanted to give it a chance but I couldn't read more than 19 chapters. It seriously gives you a headache. If you want to read it, you better turn off your brain to be able to read it.