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like there's no disrespect but it needs a rewrite to be better like premise is cool izuku with speed force cause he definitely would use it better than alot of speedsters plus material science is more advanced in mha so momo could make materials that would be perfect for speedster until he learned how to make speedforce constructs
there are a couple of glaring issues that can be fixed one in the beginning if you use a character with a truth detector quirk they would determine izukus dad not to have done the crime so you should have both parents killed otherwise that's just a big plot hole which would require rewriting some of this but the more you write using broken logic in the story the more you would need to change for the edited version should you write one
honestly I'd prefer every other day uploads to help prevent burnout and give a potential for some chapter stockpiling
so far so good but one thing is some ghost riders can use wings to fly In a couple versions I've seen most utilize vehicles to stay with the times but ghost riders look pretty much like angels of death with wings
I love it there's incredible pacing reasonable nerfs that benefit mc because of it and ability wise thoughts being put in good job keep up the good work
mcs totally gonna rip the hero commission apart can totally see mc building an opposing organization that acts as an adventures guild that allows quirk usage as a all around ability to boost production and development and use reconstruction from hero villain battles as a goodwill to further dismantle the common hero villain dynamic and make use of unconventional quirks that are day to day based
this was an amazing story all the way up to chapter 16 and then author did an unforgivable not maximizing mc character growth and potential and there isn't any significant reason or reward for doing so it was spontaneous and seemed so rushed now it is redeemable by rewriting the end of chapter 16 forgoing level up to maximize potential but otherwise after chap 16 so far I have lost interest in this story
I agree with this and quite honestly as chaos host o don't think chaos would allow for a level up without maximizing his stat potential so personally this kinda killed my enjoyment of the story
honestly excited for speed force constructs since vibrating swords would be able to cut through all materials and well speed force suit do we have a design in mind or not quite yet
other than povs chapter names and identifiable arcs once you get to that point otherwise a great start hopefully mc gains control or melds with Zarathos because even if he rides different vehicles winged ghost rider is terrifying but his range of powers is really interesting all around
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