There are two Simba. when Asafa believed that his brother was dead, he named one of his cubs simba

Normally I'd think that she's overused but considering how old MC will be in canon, then only Hancock is left to be considered I think. Yamoto is my favourite, but she won't be born for a good while.

We think alike, I would've complained if you named him Rocks, because that would imply that he was his son. You smart!!!. But I'll still complain! Why is he called D.? The D. is obviously lineage or bloodline, you can't just give someone the Name D, all his kids would later also be called D. and it would be a fake lineage. Those that are called D. are somehow connected, how? we don't know, but you can't just make non D's into D's

I had the same trouble, but here's some advice, it's better to cut too much than too little. it's too hard to read otherwise. Otherwise it's a great story so far, well done!

The story is really well written, a great start so far and enjoyable... there's just one major flaw that I recommend that the author fixes. The paragraphs are really long, making it straining for the eyes and hard to read. there are unnecessarily long paragraphs that are like a running text that flows without end. When I started out writing fanfics, that was the first error I committed that I had to learn to fix, and if you the author can correct this, you'll have very popular stories in the future based on what you've written so far. Yes, I did write this review in one long paragraph, running text, to make a point. below, I'll write the exact thing I did do far, but with smaller paragraphs as an example. ------- The story is really well written, a great start so far and enjoyable... There's just one major flaw that I recommend that the author fixes. The paragraphs are really long, making it straining for the eyes, and hard to read. There are unnecessarily long paragraphs, that are like a running text that flows without end. When I started out writing fanfics, that was the first error I committed that I had to learn to fix, and if you the author can correct this, you'll have very popular stories in the future based on what you've written so far. This should have been much easier to read and understand, hopefully, you got my point. 3.9/5 and if you correct the paragraphs, It'll be a 4.3/5.

Great story but one fatal flaw, you need to make smaller paragraphs, its straining for the eyes to see a big pile of text. learn to cut it up a bit and create smaller paragraphs.

Amazing, Sexy, Cute, Great, funny! YES, YES YES YES!

you're right but the difference is that in canon, there's like 1 minute scene every other episode. while here, every chapter has between 40-60 % corn. there's barely any plot

The story is great, but it has a flaw that will make readers either love it or hate it, the story essentially becomes corn later on. about 40-50% is lemon scenes. This is greatly saddening since the story in itself is great.

Why did you make this a harem? this was soo good until the last part where he becomes a Chinese MC. "you're all mine bla blah." like dude, what did you smoke. iIwas so excited to read a smallville fic... I'll continue reading but reluctantly. Also, it feels like the friendship between lex and Clark developed a little too fast, as if they were best friends from the beginning, that's not true. what made Lex sicha fan of ark was that Clark denied the truck. it was the first time he met someone that doesn't care for his money nor want it, so lex started respecting hia values and principles.

You sure about that..?

I don't even know how you cooked up that idea.

What can I say that hasn't been said? The writing quality is really good, Everything's fine except for one thing, story development. He sucks at basketball and 28 chapters in, he still hasn't gotten better, arguably he got worse. When he was handicapped at least he knew how to play, but when he got a new body that was supposedly physically perfect for athletics, his skills got worse than when he sat in a wheelchair. But don't misunderstand, I read up to 28 chapters in one go, so it isn't a hopeless case, the story is entertaining in other ways.

My friend had a full grown beard by the age of 13 so no new news

Oh there goes gravity

Heroes think alike

No, you are the best part

It is completed. The story is based on real life experience.