Ironlotuce
Love reading fantasy novels. especially the ones with no love and harems in them. especially NO HAREMS!!!
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Boooo, dont litsen to them. I am a big fan of the deranged giggling, mwahaha. I feel like people act seriously and dour because they are putting on a mask (or they went through trauma) and since this mc's greatest wish is to be free, being able to get rid of the mask and be his inner child is the greatest proof of his freedom. So ride on, deranged giggling, you are a symbol of freedom!
Well, it might just be because women had wider hip-bones during medieval times, requiring less pushing, allowing them to recover faster. On top of that, babies today have wider heads compared to medieval times due to larger brain sizes. These two evolutionary trends work synergistically against mothers today and make birthing more difficult.
correlation between the two, not coloration.
tiered= tiredpowder not (forgot what's there), and let the heat of the campfire (your sentence sounds awkward without campfire)
I think the word you're thinking of is "pained" instead of painted. plus at the top, maybe you can say "attract unwanted attention" or "attract the attention of some unpleasant people" instead.
"weak" not week.
This story is very interesting the author does a great job not only building the world but also the character. Usually with stories this long, the plot becomes repetitive after the first few hundred chapters or the MC becomes overpowered and everything becomes boring. This story though manages to not only make every moment very entertaining, but also realistic. I admit sometimes when the author tries to explain something I find it a bit dry, but it helps in understanding the world better and these dry sections don't last very long so I am okay with them. On top of that, at the beginning of the story, the story was confusing since the author was not consistent (e.g. they first mentioned a Pokemon potential was blue but later they said green, then said blue again) but I promise you, the writing quality does get better so stick with it. In the end, I have become a fan and can't wait for more updates!
I think it should be "not counting them" since they later count 4 pokemon.
Whoof doggy is definitely a slow start, where in the beginning like many other people I thought the author had gone too far, there is no possible way the MC can ever amount to anything since he has been nerfed too hard. But I continued the story due to how realistic the MC's reactions are, and it panned out (specifically when he became a genin). The MC started improving, and the author's realistic style lets you immerse yourself in the world, making you feel more involved (I also feel like the author stopped doing abrupt cuts, and the whole story became smoother to follow). Although there are still some aspects I don't like (like how he seems to go deeper and deeper into the life of crime and Uchiha people) every action has a flow to it, a reason it has happened, and I am excited to see how he overcomes those challenges. Great job author, you've dragged me into your world!
Hmm considering he used to cook snakes by directly putting them IN the fire, I am also feeling suspicious.
The beginning was kind of tedious since the author was going in-depth about how this world was different from the original and so on, but after a few chapters and cases where the system finally activated, things started picking up and running from there. It became really amazing when it was not heavily sticking to the plot of detective conan, and the MC was acting like a human instead of someone just following the plot. Really love the story and can't wait for more.
I think "secrete" will be a better fit here instead of "excrete". Excrete is more conscious expulsion/seperation, a.k.a pooping while secreting is an unconscious thing, like sweat.
I thought he can now waterbend?
why doesn't he try to give some to octavia to see if she can replicate it?
Spelling: Probably meant "week" instead of "weak".
Ooofff my ethics teacher would have had his head for not getting consent.
And actually, not all albinos have fair features, the physical trait can range from normal to the extreme that we know of based on what type they have. OCA1 is the most severe, and OCA1B, OCA2, OCA3, and OCA4 are the milder versions that have pigmentation. citation: https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC2211462/