SleepyWalkerYN
I would really love it if you went into small Harem, with the princess and the daughter of the parents benefactor and his disciple, and I love the development but I would love more songs to be sung and it does feel like he is amateurish even when he has lived so many lives but that's fine, but yeah, we need and I mean NEED!!!!! SMALL HAREM!! please.[img=gift][img=recommend]
I want to know if the POV will ever split? Because for now this is just a copy of original with some added conversation and other things that changes nothing in the end... Honestly considering how many lives MC lived he should be like 100 times stronger or at least 5 times... or did he live 11k times as a mediocre waste which added to being around the level of arth at this point? So i want to know if MC will go his own way at some point or just follow arth in his canon journey while changing how they get there without changing the destination and overall results?
Man, I wanted so much to read this fic but it gives me agony to have millions or billions? ahh whatever the fact of having thousands of living beings in the soul of the protagonist gives a lot of agony and there is also a fact that one of these souls can take control of the body of the protagonist, eventually whether this will happen or not. I'll never know because I won't read it.
It's awesome the synopsis gives you a proper picture and this is the first time I have seen MC having a proper character despite the circumstances which is amazing and author does an amazing job at that too but the only problem I see here is author is nerfing him too much I mean you made duo elemental despite his experience in many worlds and Arthur would do quadra elemental because he knew how to harness 'Ki' into different properties and would do the same with 'Mana' but you made it so that the MC can't I am saying it you are nerfing him because to harness 'Aether' you have to have all 4 elements harnessing, well that's that about the writing I will say grammar is proper but spelling mistakes and POV transition would improve, The other thing I want to say is you are making the development too slow like he feels like a side character in the story because it is others's POV most of the time and not his which is Okay sometimes but after that you start losing intrest in the MC himself like I feel like he is a side character there to help and support Arthur instead of being part of the story that's the only problem I would say I have and the other being slow updates, and Please don't drop this I am so invested in the story please don't drop it.
I like to use one simple criterion for fan fiction: the moment when MC breaks off the original story. 20 chapters in, looks like superglue was applied between MC and original story. also, mc's character setting seems to be a lie, as he should have methods enough to complete the world in 5 years or so, or at least do stuff other than cultivating diligently with the OG MC. overall utilisation of MC's character setting advantages are around 5% at best. world bg is good due to original world building, story development? really? writing quality regarding grammar is great, I guess.
I love that the mc is not someone cold, but like Arthur, being reincarnated gives him that touch of a child and I like how even though that body is not his, the memories of the previous body influence his actions and what he does. It is more interesting, its past and what comes with the author's ideas.
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