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Iβd give it a shot if the grammar was any better. We can all bear with some errors and faulty translations, and letβs not talk about Chinese tropes, but this is another level. The grammar is completely out of whack and entire paragraphs repeat themselves, points of view get jumbled and entire paragraph POVS only make the story messier. Final thoughts: nice idea, a god thatβs not the Big Three and has an unusual power, executed very badly. The MC goes to sleep three chapters in and misses 1 thousand years of story and plot development.
Writing Quality: I'm sorry, but for someone like me reading this is a bit painful. I would suggest at least having an editor or beta reader to go through with it just to make corrections in grammar and sentences because some sentences don't make sense. Story Development: It's developing quite nicely, I would say. It takes a different view on the mythology. There's just not much for me to comment on right now. Characters Design: A new type of character, an OC...Horray!! The thought put on the main character was fine, I can't say fleshed out yet because I haven't seen much challenges the main character faced. But the other characters in the story overall have personalities, but they're still a bit flat to me. Updating Stability: No comment, as long as this story gets finished I don't care either how long you update or how much you update. World Background: It's a fanfiction, the world already exists. You're not creating a new world, but maybe expanding on it or building on it. But as of now, the expansion/building I have yet to see much.