Juliet_Omuadona
REVIEW Narration: Decent and immersive Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed Character development: Nice and steady Character design: Outstanding Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike Pacing: Not fast nor too slow Writing quality: Magnificent Execution of the Genre: Good pitch Story potential: High Updating Stability: Steady MESSAGE I am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean) đ ADVICE I wanted to tell that few edits has to made. The typos not the grammar. You have fluid narration for me but the typos were the dilemma of its quality. Few edits has to be made for my advice. Capital letters, punctuations. Dialogues not starting with a capital letter and not ending with a comma or period. Welp, this is a wonderful story so I want it to be edited as I like it as a reader. It was normal to see these problems just when I started. But I overcome it, so you can do it too! đ đ Peace âď¸
I was recommended this story and in spite of a few chapters available, you will discover it's a lovely tale and the author has a strong narrator voice. It's easy to overlook some typos and immerse yourself in the introduction of a promising story. It starts with a princess having her destiny turned upside down by an arranged marriage! I'm curious to discover what is the prince's curse! It gets more interesting as the chapters go! Good luck author!
This is my honest review, First Author your novel is a chefs kiss, it really interesting and has a unique plot, the story goes with flow and the description are wonderful. ( Don't mind me I just love the author whose description are clear) And tbou there were some grammatical and punctuation mistakes here and there. still no worries ( I do that too đ ) It will be better with time. And keep writing, your novel is just great!!
I am on chapter 333. I am enjoying the story and you will too if you can overlook the grammatical errors. Then again, they're not grammatical errors, the entirely wrong word is used. It's like the words were chosen based off of phonetics not meaning. You will have a gist of what the author is saying so you're able to follow along and keep reading. Despite that, I highly recommend reading this novel. You will not be disappointed .
I really loved this story. The characters and the storyline were excellent and well developed. I enjoyed the relationship between the main characters the most. The only thing that I would recommend is to have someone proofread the chapters. The grammar and spelling were often times frustrating and would take away from enjoying the story fully.
this is a cute story. A few tweaks on the baddie who's really a goodie and the poor gal sacrificed by her parents to become his wife. The problem is the writing: the translator cannot spell. hence there are traces instead of truces and the palaces have no servants but are teaming with savants, not to mention the princes who defile their parents rather than defy them. honestly, in two minutes an English speaker could turn this into a brilliant read. I'm only at ch 100 but I'll do it for free!
Phenomenal story with great characters and dialogue. There are a few minor grammar mistakes here and there. I would also like to see a bit more description about how the characters look. I'd also like a bit more description about what the environment looks like. What the palace looks like. How the nobles dress. Things like that and what the weather is like. I want to feel like I'm there. But anyway, I look forward to seeing what happens next. The African story and the cultural context is intriguing.
I find the story quite addicting. The plot can easily lure a reader in and so can the entire story of course. I find the characters very intriguing and mysterious and I am curious to know what will happen to them in the future. Overall, i see potential in this story and will definitely keep on reading! count me as a fan!
The author hooked me with the emotions that the author put on the characters. A good author could make their readers felt the characters and the author did it. I read no errors from the author's writing. I can sense that the author really did a great job by polishing the chapters. Readers would be hooked just by reading the prologue. Give this a read!