Esther_Heredia
Okay, where do I start with my review ... Why do I keep insisting on reading storys of this genre? My God, the synopsis did not prepare me for what was inside this story. It's painful to read about Jonah from the beginning and I can't believe you're not English speaking because the way this story unfolds is definitely the result of an excellent grammar. I avoid this genre because I am so easy to impress, but the descriptions really are to applaud. I think it will be difficult for me to detach myself from the feeling of being in the middle of a cemetery. Author, let me breathe! I think I can only list what surprised me the most about this story: - Excellent narrative. - Excellent characterizations of the characters -Amazing descriptions of the context and situations. -Incredible ability to transmit myself as a reader, each sensation of Jonah and the context This story definitely deserves full marks.. I need to give the author my five stars!!
The story was unique as the MC was not the best out there and he was tortured by the reality that he was ugly and deformed. The narration of the happenings were pretty clear for me and it was detailed. It doesn't disturb my reading at all. Keep updating your novel and If you reached hundred chapters, you will have 300K plus views Or more than my estimation. I know what I'm talking about because I have one. Keep it up and BTW Please check my book called "Waking up in undead world". Please review mine as I have made to yours.
The writing quality and stability of updates is very good, I also like the character design and story development, but so far it has only been the story of how a kid is having the worst time of his life. I mean seriously, what did Jonah ever do to you. But as advice from another author, I'd like to tell you that the readers here don't really like to read too much heavy stuff. I understand how good it would feel, when the story actually gets to the point where Jonah gets a moment of peace, but it's a difficulty to get to that point, is what i'm trying to say. Add some hope and humor in it if you can. But, in the end it's your novel and I am curious of the outcome.
I was trying to start reading this story, But I'm not trying to make a pact, so I'm giving up to start reading ... why think with me, if the terms of the agreement are 1-you started reading this story means you are interested in the pact. 2-finished this story counts as a sealed pact, Your soul is mine. Totally giving up to start reading.
Hello, Author! Writing Quality: I really, really think you beat me in terms of describing what's happening in your story. I find it difficult to write specific descriptions in my story and you told in your Author's Note section that English isn't your first language, and I'm so impressed. I think the only constructive criticisms I have, are that you should break your paragraphs into three, four, or five sentences and use quotes (") instead of (β) when a character is speaking. Story Development: I can't spoil here, but you should read this hidden gem. It has potential, so what are you waiting for? Character Design: You can distinguish the identities, so it's not difficult to understand who's who. Updating Stability: I don't really care about when you will update, so you should take your time. I believe rushing an update will produce half-baked results and don't hesitate to rest if you're tired! World Background: You should read it and all I can say is, it's impressive if you're interested or a fan of Horror and Thriller (or if you just want to suffer lol). I hope you'll find success in this book! It's going to stay in my library, so I'll continue to read it.
I loved your novel, the story completely absorbed me, and your character design is incredible, I was amazed since the first chapter, I felt so much empathy for Jonah. I had not read such a genre in a long time and I must say that I did not expect it. I'm already following you and waiting for more of your chapters. I should say that maybe the paragraphs are a little long but definitely enthralling. Please keep up with the good work author! Can't wait to read more chapters. [img=recommend] I guarantee this is totally worth reading.
Iβm a sucky for horror. And I got to say I enjoy your story and how you describe the MC and what he is dealing with because of his appearance. It really keeps a reading hooked amd follow through with his inner turmoil. The problem I have is your grammar. It is not bad and does not throw off the story, but you keep forgetting to add an ending punctuation for some dialogue and forgetting to capitalize the word after the dialogue(only do it if the dialogue doesnt end in a comma). And your paragraphs are long, maybe you should put some spaces between them. Other than that, your story is really good and I enjoyed the chapters you have so far. Keep up the good work!