Brother Mahua
interesting idea, but. the editor and translator of this novel has done nothing but copy paste this novel from mtl and they only do bare bone job in fixing the error on grammar or mistranslation. i already have so many novels like this in my library. around a dozen. did you know that i actually read some of them directly from mtl and doesn't bother to read the novel in this site anymore. its because the quality of the translation on this site (webnovel dot com) is NOT much better than MTL. heck mtl is much better because the story development is already progress much further than Webnovel, and sometimes webnovel divide one chapter from mtl into 3-4 part.
if possible, make the mc have a steadier or calm character. you can also make it the character to be funnier. the character the mc displays is a little worrying, you can't allow him to be courting death all the time right? he is to egoistic, arrogant.... This is just my advice, I also hope your novel gets picked