Comments of chapter undefined of Harry Potter and the Silent Guardian
Harry Potter and the Silent Guardian
TalesByJaz
Chapter comments33
Even if don't create hate story, wouldn't make sense for me to love them. What you're making them do is horrible, and can't be affection for their parents after this, especially for James. I think you're doing something intriguing, and ignoring it would ruin it, I believe.
Become a KOL for my discussion channel!
Engage with others on the app, and become a moderator for my discussion channel. Let this be a place for sharing with other fellow bookworms!
TalesByJaz
They will tamper with his memories, they will take away all the memories he has of the magical world, which is mostly due to having lived with his grandparents, they will take away his memories of his parents, to make him believe he is an orphan, everything so that he won't be the lord he is by right, you did all this but you don't want him to hate his parents, and especially Dumbledore? It's obvious that, since you wrote it this way, no matter how flawed the logic was, you have to write a reaction, which has to be consistent with the crime, you created this unnecessary drama, now you're going to have to deal with it .
this was a goo idea but the way it was done really got me thinking of how you can make progress emotionally without any of the people he turn to I mean dude just woke up as a kid seeing his grandparents die and him having a jealous father( hypocrite )and a mother who got tricked by dumble to give her kid how this a good man when he committing a crime they could have left he with sirius and they both could leave the country change his name to hadrian black and people will think its sirius kid
"This story isn't for bashing anyone, I just do this to explore more about the wizarding world and it's characters" - Author. Then why the chuck did you need to go such a route which breaks story immersion just by it's pure unbelievably contrived plot instead of just SI in another noble family, for example?
very forced plot. it was very unconvincing that they left him like a bag of potatoes. And then you went and said: "he is not bad, just politician". I believe you wanted to write a politician-grey Dumbledore but i think you failed so what is happening here pretty evil dumbledore and stupid parents but there is no bashing or revenge. You set it as if revenge story so far and say "it is not a revenge story". It is really unsettling.
so unrealistic for supposed "loving" parents to abandon their child through the rationalisation of an external source....It has always been reiterated how Lily is so much more smarter than the rest of the wizarding world, and yet your writing has not shown an ounce of that vaunted intelligence, whatsoever
