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Comments of chapter undefined of My Trillion-Dollar Assets is Exposed by My Wife's Bragging!

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My Trillion-Dollar Assets is Exposed by My Wife's Bragging!

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NovaLuna
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This is the workings of a rough draft. Mostly dialogue, and very little added in for descriptions, etc... It has a long way to go to become a decent story. and this is just the 1st chapter... đŸ«Ł Not even sure I want to continue, if the rest is like this.

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NovaLuna
NovaLunaLv13NovaLuna

True, but it doesn't change the fact that you can tell this was a rough draft. It's very easy to write the dialogue 1st, then go back through to add in details, description, actions, touch, smells, sounds, etc... I never said it had to be overly wordy. But a good description is essential for a good story. 🙂

LaoTze:True, but the dialogue is at least reasonably realistic-ish. I’d rather that than a boatload of description and cardboard characters that speak only to deliver information.
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Poils
PoilsLv14Poils

Fellas... don't grab a woman like this. You gon end up in prison. Use your words first.

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Pratik_
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Tibbles
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I would be scared of this woman too, if something sounds too good to be true run it probably is

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Gold_Cypher
Gold_CypherLv3Gold_Cypher

What an interesting pairing

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Roshan_Haobijam
Roshan_HaobijamLv4Roshan_Haobijam

it's very interesting to read please keep it up

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Leo_Gulles
Leo_GullesLv13Leo_Gulles

nice one

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Co_Francis
Co_FrancisLv10Co_Francis

Nice..

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Gaea_Rivera
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Elvessa_Tanierla
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i like the youthful. story ..as as n old days..it makes me become a youthful memory of my younger days..thanks gor this as tory ..but how long this story must be free

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DaoistFOO2ko
DaoistFOO2koLv1DaoistFOO2ko

nice

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chichi32310
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Is this story for sale under a different name on Amazon or something it looks very familiar?

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chris_Do_random
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Daniel_Ansah_8385
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haha

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Tumwine_Idan
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its'sreally amazing story to read thank you

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Ramleh_Puteh
Ramleh_PutehLv11Ramleh_Puteh

very good story

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Aeva_Omuru
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interested

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VL0C
VL0CLv2VL0C

As an introvert, I would've felt annoyed at the man, even though he meant no harm. I get that he was worried, but he was so chatty that it made me feel uncomfortable and cringe reading it, especially when it was all him assuming things.

6mth
SATAN_ROUMI
SATAN_ROUMILv2SATAN_ROUMI

h

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