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Thank you for explaining this. I was honestly very confused by how it was worded (attending college before high school).
Yes. There was no doubt in my mind about that. It's why his blood is so much more potent than other house leaders. It's not diluted over the years, which is why he can create races that have long since been extinct, or considered to now be "rare". His blood is just as strong as any of the originals blood was.
True, but it doesn't change the fact that you can tell this was a rough draft. It's very easy to write the dialogue 1st, then go back through to add in details, description, actions, touch, smells, sounds, etc... I never said it had to be overly wordy. But a good description is essential for a good story. 🙂
R.I.P. Theo!
Typo: "her" face should be "his" face
Ooh! That's interesting! I remember seeing that photo of them both showing their crest marking how they were both slaves. Thank you for explaining about the difference of the crest placement! 🙂
Pretty!
Oh dang. That sucks. I'm sorry! 😢
I get the feeling as if Allen just learned how to access Reig's Shikai state, here! 🤭😜
Author: This paragraph is a repeat of the paragraph directly prior to this. Just worded slightly different. I'm assuming you were re-writing the paragraph, and forgot to delete the old paragraph?
Thank you! I wasn't sure if it was just a phrase I wasn't familiar with, or not. 🙂
Typo: "she can tell" should be "he can tell".
Typo: "how she got out" should be "how he got out". The sentence is referring to Ottar (a guy).
Typo: "Se" should be "She".
Interesting! Since this is his ability, then the question of if Allen is part Norttish can easily be explained away. Have him display his Amnis casting abilities, to show how "little mana" he has to dispel any assumptions that he is a threat. Allen doesn't know how to tap into his Demonic Mana (which I'm assuming is was Reig actually absorbed) yet, and he hasn't been inside the human world long enough to have absorbed a lot of Divine Mana (which is why his mana is so low). But Allen doesn't KNOW any of this yet. So the Bishop's ability won't be able to sense that Allen is hiding something, if he isn't aware of it himself.
Good girl!
Please tell me there's gonna be a plot twist! Something to keep him on the path of hating humans! 🙏
Keep dreaming, Princess! It's nice to have goals, but keep them realistic! 🤭
I love Allen! 🤭