Comments of chapter undefined of Harry Potter: Heir to Ancient Magic
Harry Potter: Heir to Ancient Magic
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author I have to say that his story has a lot of potential and future but I think he is making the MC too strong very fast I agree that he is much better than the others but the fact that he could damage dombuldor is exaggerated in my opinion and this I don't think Voldemort is an enemy that I managed to put the MC at risk, you also stick very closely to the film without making many changes because despite all the interventions of the MC I don't see anything new apart from the fact that Harry's parents are alive and therefore Sirius is free everything remains the same and static, he has ways to push the MC the world does not end in Great Britain, you can include friction between magical organizations, you can include new ones, or you can make Grindelwald resurface to cause chaos in the future etc. . but please don't let this story get boring
Dumbledore and Voldemort would beat Adam without breaking a sweat. Adam only hurt Dumbledore, because the world attacked Dumbledore, at that moment Adam was connected with the world, his magic was at a level he can't reach alone yet. As for adding things, I need ideas, and I'm still a little unsure what I can write without readers hating it. But I think I can think of some new conflict to add to the story. Thanks for the sugestion. If you have something in mind, comment that I can write about
