aleksandra_pano10
It was very interesting that I did not know when I got to the ending of this chapter. So Ryoko is possessed but why did her mother want her to hide the truth. I guess the truth will reveal itself with time.
Typing up your content on a grammar checking app like Grammarly would work wonders :) It'd also help to be a bit more descriptive - semi-script format could work for more comedic works, but for something serious and dramatic, you'd need to provide appropriate amounts of description to draw readers in.
Desdemona is really annoying here, and Axel is a pushover. Their personalities were written really well here. I also like the scenes unfolding in this chapter. The typos were just making me a bit confused about what's happening with who. If they were intentional though, I apologize. I'm probably just not used to the style😅