I'd grade the writing quality anywhere from B+ to A- approximately. No major grammatical errors, and the author's more than satisfactory command of English already places him miles ahead of at least half the other writers over here on WN. As for the story itself, reading this takes me back to the .hack franchise I used to love playing through (and watching) in my teens. Lastly, with regard to points for improvement? There's really not much I have on that end, considering what's already been written is already very good. The one bit of general advice I'd say applies here is to go back to your material and proofread it at least once or twice a month for any grammatical errors you may have missed at an earlier point. Well done overall.

Well, shoot. I'd easily rank the writing quality at somewhere within the top 10-20% percentile here on WN. I saw very few grammatical errors, if at all, and the narration comes across like the hero telling us what's going on and giving commentary here and there. Not sure why, but I'm reminded of those teen series that used to air on Disney and Nickelodeon back in the day. PS - it's 'body transference', not 'body transferring' :)

The writing's got room for improvement (as others here may have noticed), but as of this review's posting, whatever flaws were present don't detract from the content itself too much. Additionally, it may be best to limit allusions to existing works in pop culture to a minimum. I particularly recommend looking up comma splices, run-on sentences and sentence fragments on Google since these are the common mistakes I came across in your work. PS - if you'd like a more detailed go-over, kindly PM me over Discord or something :)

Not a bad start, all things considered. I detected the occasional sentence fragment and comma splice (on top of the punctuation issues here and there that the others mentioned), but they're tolerable and can be fixed given a good proofread and edit. PS - on the 'Doctor Strange' bit, try looking up the term 'astral projection' or 'astral form'. It may just be me, but unless it's first person perspective and I'm literally laying out a character's thoughts in the narrative, I don't really like alluding to pop culture too much.

The writing's really good - I'd say it's in the upper 20-30% of all output here on WN. It's not without hiccups here and there (things being capitalized that shouldn't, for instance - it's 'deja vu', lowercase), but those hiccups barely detract at all from the content itself, and they're nothing a thorough proofreading and editing session can't fix. PS - this wouldn't happen to have been based on the movies 'Bruce Almighty' and/or 'Oh God', would it?

Hi there - glad you liked it. For the record, I WAS inspired by Ghost Rider (specifically Robbie Reyes as he appeared in Agents of SHIELD) when I wrote this, but I also took cues from Daredevil, Batman and (to an extent) Green Arrow as he appeared in the CW series. Till next time :D

Considering English isn't your first language, you've gotten a good grasp on it so far. There's room for improvement in terms of grammar (Grammarly's got lots of articles on common writing mistakes and how to avoid them), especially where the comma splices, tense consistency and punctuation use is concerned, but it's nothing that a good proofread and rewrite can't fix. Keep at it.

It's got potential, for sure. The writing's got room for improvement, but the errors in grammar and composition that ARE present don't detract too much from the content itself. The plotline seems in line with various K-dramas I've caught wind of over the years, which does say something about the author's interests which may be influencing her writing. Keep working on your writing, and you'll go far.

Considering English isn't your first language, you've gotten a good grasp on it so far. There's room for improvement in terms of grammar (beyond the actual grammar checker, Grammarly's got lots of articles on common writing mistakes and how to avoid them), especially where the comma splices, tense consistency and punctuation use is concerned, but it's nothing that a good proofread and rewrite can't fix. You're off to a good start, all things considered, so just keep at it.

Well done.

Good eye, Ghost Rider WAS one of my inspirations for this. If you liked what you read so far, hang on because we'll get to what makes her tick eventually :)

From my experience, well-written stories are a bit of a minority on WN, and this is one of those. I didn't catch any spelling or grammatical errors, for one, which tells me the author's either experienced or a prodigy. It also does away with the typical beginning segments of an isekai story in favor of throwing its heroine to the wolves (or in this case, reptiles) straightaway, which earns it another kudos in my book. The author's gonna have quite a hit on her hands if she keeps this up all throughout. Well done indeed.

..This escalated quickly.

Toto, I think she's not in Kansas anymore.

..Well, shoot.

Kiran's that girl playing an MMORPG who somehow stumbles into a high level dungeon while her level's still in the single digits :))

Looks like our heroine's in a pickle.

..I've seen at least one or two isekai anime in the past, but I don't remember any of them beginning quite like this. The heroes there got the benefit of an easy intro, but yours seems to have been forcibly yanked from her daily routine and thrown right into the middle of nowhere in the other world. Kudos on the originality.

No spoilers, but that's not *entirely* accurate ;)

First off, points for tackling something so heavy, and in the very first chapter of your very first attempt at writing no less. There's loads of potential along with ample room for improvement, but I've full faith that this author can only get better given time, practice and experience. Godspeed, miss.