aleksandra_pano10
Desdemona is really annoying here, and Axel is a pushover. Their personalities were written really well here. I also like the scenes unfolding in this chapter. The typos were just making me a bit confused about what's happening with who. If they were intentional though, I apologize. I'm probably just not used to the styleđ
Typing up your content on a grammar checking app like Grammarly would work wonders :) It'd also help to be a bit more descriptive - semi-script format could work for more comedic works, but for something serious and dramatic, you'd need to provide appropriate amounts of description to draw readers in.