Barion_Trident
So far, the punctuation is off, the conversations are just strange and it was already raining in the first paragraph but just started raining after building a shelter, started a fire bc its cold but its supposed to be raining and even then his mom is super powerful and a vampire but the cold is an issue to them? and why would the mother suddenly decide to drink a potion to commit suicide after all the effort to escape and why would the son even think she would be trying to commit suicide. just a whole lotta wack so far but i’ll atleast try to make it to 10 chapters and see