Comments of chapter undefined of High Human in Crossed Worlds - A HP x DxD Fic
High Human in Crossed Worlds - A HP x DxD Fic
DonnutHermit
Chapter comments26
Not really a fan of the progression at all. First started with HP canon in the future, and if it went from there while slowly explaining their past I'd have been fine with it. Then you went back to explain Erik's past. Alright I can accept it if you want to narrate Erik's story slowly along the years and make the HP part like a prologue/future. But now it seems that you're only skimming through things for the sake of it. Like Selena and Erik's relationship. It was just one "they're dating", then jumpcut and "they're engaged". And if my memory doesn't fail me they haven't had a single dialogue in this "past". IMO if what you want is just to explain how Erik and his wives met, etc, you should've just done it in flashbacks during the main story. As you did with Jeanne, rather than this. This is just making it seem as if it's a story when it's rather a recap of events.
