Please let him rip into her.

crazy to see how much you got out of the couple of chapters I've enjoyed what I read but haven't picked up on half the things you've seemed too.

glad to see you back but hope kai starts doing things himself and doesn't join up with Derek.

Don't think fire is really a effective strategy here.

Please don't make it a stupid favour he was given a flashlight and directions he shouldnt have to do too much in return.

Honestly think it would of been better if he got with someone from hollywood not some random oc.

Basically made Barry useless a emp can cut him off from the speed force? killed any interest in the story with the forced capture.

Not liking how much of the story kats been taking up recently.

Really the mention of a woman he's known a month gets him to stop? was a mood killer for the chapter.

Owen has seemed like a background character for basically all of this taken arc.

I Thought you said they was both doing it? are they taking turns or something?

Honestly I think you should of gone for something more normal having a dragon as his animagus basically lifts him to a dark lords level of power all he would have to do would be transform to win.

Please don't actually have him agree to this no matter what she offers.

so it's only 3 extra chapters for a fiver?

Honestly I pay for a few p**reon stories but the release rate and no word of how many if any advanced chapters if get for my money I don't see the point In paying.

Killed all interest in the story when you force in stupid things like this.

lucas*

Honestly was a great chapter was enjoying the crazy lucks he seemed to know what he was doing and only acted like that when it was necessary the whole part after poppy shot billy ruined it.

And this is where you lose me best of luck but this cliche just killed the story.