Grayback
why in the fk you Mr. Crappy Author are all over the place. There's no proper direction of your story progression. And don't you fkiñ dare make sexual intercourses longer than necessary. Keep 'em short like your dick. Also don't develop romance shits in it. just keep them as sex friends and nothing more. On that note don't make eliza MC's friend or sex friend. keeping her as enemy is good. If you dare turn every fkiñ girl into MC's girl, I'll leave bad reviews to your story on every platform dragging your name through the muddiest of waters. So after reading my comment, you may have gotten the clear picture of being all over the place. My comment is similar to your story. So I'm hoping for you to improve it with proper syntaxes and words.
My thoughts, good plot twists. At least Eren is not having a smoothsailing like every other mc. And this is also in a way good, that he baited another person to be the O.W.B.! Too bad that he lost his girl, oh well he needs some sweet pain as stimulation, that he has a lot more than he thinks that is close to his heart. And more stimulation to climb for power like a hungry Mada fakah.
the moment I liked personally- Life Drain getting used on wraiths. which is ironical coz they shouldn't have anything in them to drain life out of lol man, I felt the dread Eren felt when he met that mummy. that piece was beautifully written. then comes Elizas declaration of war. lowkey want her to get out of purgatory fast. you are right. the book title fits her. don't get mad but this was a job well done I frankly wasn't expecting from this book. suffice to say I may take breaks, I may keep it on hold but i wud come back and keep on reading this book until it finishes . good job author.
Purgatory was fun, good amount of action and plot twists. He got a lot of good stuff from there, but lets be honest, the best was his transformation and realization what his innate abilities can do. Cant wait to see how he s gonna utilize them. Im kinda suprised that, hot-old hag is still alive, i guess those are the perks of Half-Blood. A suprise, to be sure, but a welcome one 😎. Well, her character is kinda psychopatic, i can easly find her a good match, with similiar personality 😁. About Reen, looks like there will be more crazy plans to gain power, and thats the good part about it. Im curious what he will do. Goog read, thanks 😁.
liked the rewards eren got. i would have been very mad if reen was taken by Arthur. but since all this was planned by Eliza who is a sage can't exactly blame anyone. i still wonder if eren could have avoided this mess had he just not visited the purgatory. what happened in the last timeline? did Eliza get out in it? coz dom was very much alive in it if I'm not wrong.
The arc is honestly pretty great, Grayback. It’s easily the best one so far, to me. I was hoping that this wouldn’t turn into what’s seems to be the new ‘evil mc’ genre where everything goes according to plan, and MC’s evil, because why not. But this arc is very meaningful to Eren’s character, I think. It’s a step back and also a step forward for him. The price he might have to pay for power that he seeks, the possibility that being the most powerful and talented might still not be enough. But, this is his informal introduction to the wider world, in a way. At least now he’s seen something that could be a semblance of the peak he never knew of. His ambition seems more real now. Before it was revenge and the jaded realization that the world isn’t a place for nice people, but that doesn’t necessarily translate to a desire for power. Not to me, at least. Now, however, he wants to save Reen and himself from the clutches of this half-dead Sage. And he wants a lot of the power for himself too. And it seems like he’s gained some useful tools for all of that to come true too. Looking forward to it. Your novel’s just kept getting better since the first chapters! Hope that continues
Don't worry, author-san. The pace of the work is great and explanations are necessary and welcome to better understand the whole picture. It's sad that Reen is left behind and I hope Eren's reunion with her will be emotional. She is part of Eren and Eren is part of her, they are 2 but they are also 1. However, this also served for Eren to have a greater goal, to seek strength to recover Reen and in the future face Sage Eliza. Or maybe become allies? Who knows? After all Eren and Eliza are made of the same material. What I didn't like was how Eren, at times, became too dependent on hints from the Spirit of the relic inside him (the name is Alephee? I don't remember now). To the point of saying that without these tips and suggestions, he would have died on some occasions in this "mini-arc". He has decades of experience in fighting and survival but sometimes it feels like he's almost equaled by a few minor prodigies or he's pushed to the limit against people of the same level of strength. Considering Eren's characteristics, within the same strength level, he should win without excessive difficulties. To conclude, this work is amazing and I hope you keep up the good work!
I have to say my expectations are on a whole different level after loosing reen. I never thought the author would go for that but i have to say it makes everything so much more interesting. Now we have a sage manipulating him and he will want to get stronger and cut those strings. At the same time i hope the author doesnt go the lazy route of the Eliza constantly making him do stuff. He has to have time both to grow and meet her demands (while trying to figure out how to screw her). Also lets hope the school ark isnt over. People to screw, things to learn points to earn, potions to make , etc, etc. Excellent work author, keep it up. Dont forget his team either!
I actually think it was a good thing that he lost Reen at this time. This may be an unpopular opinion but I think it would be difficult to continue writing Eren as a dual ranker individual. Having Erin constantly downgrade his powers during the ranking battles and when working with his masters would be hard to sustain over the long term. I thought purgatory was great, utilized his bonded companions only during the very beginning, and after that Eren had to figure out more things on his own. This is probably been tremendous for his personal growth. He's also learning how not to rely upon certain op skills and broaden his horizons, as well as having new skills and abilities that he needs to learn to master. This bodes well for the future of your story.