Capt_mermain1
you really need an editor, your work is passable but you keep going in circles even if its not needed, for example when buggy goes to lougetown he will first go buy the necessities he need, then he will go to the mountain in the back of the town after, then you came back again to him actually buying the necessities and then you'll go back to actually him going in the mountains. then there's also with oden and the book Rogers gave him then thw shack in the mountain. you keep repeating everything just to lengten the chapter