Tons of little grammatical mistakes, but what can I expect from fanfiction these days. Everything else is pretty good. ...................

Worm is a web series written about a world with superpowers. very grim story. Lots of fanfiction on sites like spacebattles. What op is referencing here is the Parahumans Online segments of the story with a forum that is exactly like this. Therefore the author got this format from worm.

happy new year

I guess 'ed' doesn't exist in the author's vocabulary.

I enjoy how much you update this. I always check back and there are a few chapters waiting, when other books haven't updated in days.

Why so many commas?

I enjoy the story. .....................................................................................................................

Reads like a typical chinese novel, very weird interactions and insults. I personally don't enjoy that type of writing. ffffffffffffffffffffffffff

Why would he be speechless? Wouldnt he just feel discouraged or something?

Do you mean "after showing..."? cuz I think I've seen that earlier too.

The grammar is getting worse.

This book is all over the place. Cant you keel l e thought going?

Never seen this before.

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Although reading it like some sort of script is kind of weird to me, it is better than when writers have an unintroduced quote, and then for some reason write the person that it turns out wasn't speaking after the quote. For example, "Blah." Zach smiles. Turns out, Zach was smiling at 'blah'. Didn't think of that, did you?

What is this responding to?

Every single novel with a system brings in the "create dungeon" skill. It's so over done.

This reads like one of those Chinese novels. So many exclamation points and so much repetition.

You know there is such a thing called Periods at any point durjng a sentence. Ive knly noticed it recently but you never have a period until the end of that “paragraph”. Kt makes it difficult to read.

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