This reminds me of Bruce Sentar's series. It was similar in premise, but I actually think your writing so far is a grade higher. He started out strong, but petered out. Rushing plot and so underdeveloped some relationships and plot.
Folks never stop try to find something good in this site, sometimes when stumble upon a great novel like this here, it's to soon to talk about that but I see great potential, if the author don't make a mess in the long run of course. Thanks for the chapter dude, much love~
