Omega200
For my taste, his reactions are a bit artificial and the dialoge is missing completely. You just advance the plot, but dont care about writing his character and enhancing the story. The story in its enterity feels a bit soulles, good idea but to focused ob the plot. But the idea is worthy to put in a fanfic
For my taste, his reactions are a bit artificial and the dialoge is missing completely. You just advance the plot, but dont care about writing his character and enhancing the story. The story in its enterity feels a bit soulles, good idea but to focused ob the plot. But the idea is worthy to put in a fanfic
The ability to control fire but not create it would make more sense for a pyrokinesis/telekinesis user. It will also help you to not make the MC too OP too fast. TK is basically the ability to control but not create (except for his inner energy). I suppose later on he could transform the energy in his body into "physical energy" like fire.
I think it's better if you had the MC train his quirk. You referenced the quirk of MC in superpower wiki, it's great, it have a good power levels for Telekinesis. You will have a training arc after every main story arc, if the MC start from basic level (Lvl 1), which is already strong, to absolute level (Lvl 6, Godlike). Even with just a master level (Lvl 4), the MC will become Immortal. The canon start 10+ year after gaining quirk. From the start, you made the MC expert level (Lvl 3) using molecular manipulation to make every cells of his whole body a carrier of psychic energy, meaning, a genius MC. Then you're saying the MC won't one shot every one. The genius MC, who after gaining an expert level Telekinesis quirk, started training from day 0 to become more powerful, will face challenges 10+ year later. Then the plot armor of other characters is OP.
just want to say that he wouldn't be able to make fire because he can at most control 200 lbs (five times the average weight of a four year old) which isn't enough to make a flame at most a few sparks and air isn't flammable so he couldn't just make a flame and if he wanted to make a fire bird he would have to control the fire to make that shape which would in turn inclose the flame making it just die out
I didn't know telekinesis was so appealing basic Attraction and Repulsion - The user can attract or repel objects with the power of the mind. Call of Arms - The user can summon their weapon to themselves using the power of the mind. Immobilization - User can use mind power to prevent targets from moving Levitation - The user can lift himself in the air. intermediaries Telekinetically Enhanced Condition - User can use telekinetic strength to enhance their physical attributes. Telekinetic Force Telekinetic Regeneration Telekinetic Resistance Telekinetic Speed Psionic Healing - User can heal individuals using telekinetic force. Vibration Emission - User can emit vibrations strong enough to break objects using their mind. Explosion Induction - User can make targets explode using their mind. Mental Weapon Handling - The user can use the power of their mind to wield their weapon hands-free. Force Field Generation - The user can emit their telekinetic waves and control them in such a way that they produce force fields that serve to protect them and defend others. Molecular Manipulation - User can use their mind to move and reshape molecules. Telekinetic Pressure - User can release waves of telekinetic force to crush or destroy surrounding targets. Telekinetic Teleportation - The user can teleport using telekinetic force to move molecules from their body to another point instantly. Telekinetic Flight - User can use their telekinesis to take flight. advanced Energy Manipulation - User can move energy with their mind. Matter Manipulation - The user can modify the structure of matter with their mind. Organic Manipulation Dimensional Travel - User can use telekinetic force to distort dimensions and transit between them. maxims Space-Time Manipulation - User can control and distort the space-time continuum from their telekinesis. Reality Manipulation - User can use telekinetic force to distort the fabric of reality. Particle Manipulation - The user can manipulate matter and energy from their base using the power of the mind. Omni-Manipulation - User can use their telekinesis to manipulate everything.