Comments of chapter undefined of Devouring the Heavens (ATG)
Devouring the Heavens (ATG)
Fellbane
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well, I know what kind of development author want from this event in the chapter, though despite knowing that, this one still was not that fun to read... maybe if the event wasn't built by his way of flaunting with Dusty or how he ignores various hints, it would be more enjoyable chapter. Like make him not aware of the greed stare, and you don't need to explain in detail the guy stare in greed either, just give a little clue to reader with "a glance" or something like that would be enough. make him distracted on the way but don't write that he is followed right from the start. Make it like he was ambushed at first, then make he realize that he was followed from the start gradually at the end. That way, rather than naivety and stupidity, the vibe the reader get would be that he was distracted and catch off guard because he lower his guard in the civilization area. Well, that' my opinion... in the end of the day, it's your story, so write anything you see fit... Thanks for the chapter and hope you realese the new ones soon...
Fellbane:You know its not easy to write content and nobody is forcing you to read it.
I had high hopes for this. An MC that didn't turn into a deranged psychopath like everybody else in the setting. I'm still hoping for the best but this a massive red flag with the whole excuse of changing his mentality into a murder hobo like every other MC and character from the setting. Blah blah, xianxia worlds are hardcore blah blah, idc, I want a decent human being as an MC for once. For what it's worth, you didn't lose me as a reader yet but this is a solid first step toward me dropping if these mentality changes keep getting forced. Having a heroic MC in xianxia for once would be fun.
I wrote this chapter, knowing it would be a mixed bag. However, I felt like he needed a change in mentality before he reached Floating Cloud. The problem with being alone with just a pet snake for weeks on end is that she is the only other important character I can write about lol. I stand by my decision to have him kill people but he will not become a murder hobo, there were reasons for him losing control which will be explained next chapter. I did hope to get two out today but editing nearly 5k words to make it sound better on top of writing the rest of my current draft chapter already took a few hours and my brain is a little mush now. If anyone has constructive comments on how I could have done it differently, I would be happy to read them.
Too everyone who doesn't want to see a murderous MC i think your reading the wrong genre and fan fic you might want to stick to disney movies and nickelodeon..... on the bright side I'm glad that Dusty is alive and this one of the best ways to shift the mentality of the MC without something that will create a lasting trauma.... will he go around killing everyone who annoys him a doubt it ... it's ATG as much as a hate it admit it cultivation novels have no room for mercy .
I found it funny that after all he killed them anyway, what an idiot. Would have been better if Dusty stayed dead and he managed to save himself, at least then we could say that bad things happen but this just looks like the "teach him a lesson without anything really bad happening, only pretend". Kind turns the entire chapter into a joke.
I hope that this is the last time forced niavety is used for character development. He is clearly aware of the dangers of this world and when he should have the highest anxiety upon entering a city for the first time. He even flees quickly with a sense of danger but he didn’t even think about being attacked? Why do so many authors believe that characters must be forced to change? The mc has been written as intelligent and aware he has to change and adapt to the world. Why can he not choose to change himself instead of some plot taking away his iq? I am enjoying this novel a lot so i hope the niave mc who continously grows careless to experience growth trope doesnt continue. The intro was one of the best i have ever read, but this chapter felt like a step in the wrong direction.
this chapter was full of naivety and i started hating the MC for lettting risk dusty life for some scumy cultivators who knows how many innocent they killed yet he didnt kill them right of the bat, and in the one of the previous chapters it was said that he was a avid reader of cultivation novels like martial god asura , martial word, PMG , ATG. these novels show the greed and crual natur of cultivators yet he forgot that and thouth that the would do as said. huh ,