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well, I know what kind of development author want from this event in the chapter, though despite knowing that, this one still was not that fun to read... maybe if the event wasn't built by his way of flaunting with Dusty or how he ignores various hints, it would be more enjoyable chapter. Like make him not aware of the greed stare, and you don't need to explain in detail the guy stare in greed either, just give a little clue to reader with "a glance" or something like that would be enough. make him distracted on the way but don't write that he is followed right from the start. Make it like he was ambushed at first, then make he realize that he was followed from the start gradually at the end. That way, rather than naivety and stupidity, the vibe the reader get would be that he was distracted and catch off guard because he lower his guard in the civilization area. Well, that' my opinion... in the end of the day, it's your story, so write anything you see fit... Thanks for the chapter and hope you realese the new ones soon...
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Well, not all story started with MC point of view, so I thought the MC is male as well even though the story started with female point of view because the sinop talking about the boy who live, so.. yeah... Oh I read Sherlock Holmes a bit in the past and through the book, I remember it's mostly not the amazing detective POV, but his buddy doctor instead....
True… but if the effect is reasonable, like relax the mind etc. but many exagerate it become something cultivation-like thing in a story that has nothing to do with chinese cultivation story... Increase energy, increase dantian, increase energy core... What next, increase d1ck?!!?