Comments of chapter undefined of Moonlight Summer

Promising start, with that little flashback in the middle. You've got a few typos and syntax errors. If you're not native (which happens to the best of us), I recommand to pass the text through a good software that will do the job for you. I use Antidote (from Druide company) but there might exists a few free ones.

I love how you're presenting a dilema at the beginning of the story . It's drawing us in and keeping us on our toes. I'm yearning for more already . I can't wait to continue reading this book.

this is great, a great build up to the tension. I'm already intrigued about what happened to Irianda

Exciting beginning, looking forward to reading more. 😍❤❤❤

Thanks dear