The review is a bit low for now since you're just starting, but aside from a few things I like the way you write. The character hasn't been fleshed out so I'm not gonna critique that much same with the story, and now for the world background i suggest you play around with it to truly show your story
Mr_Myeterious
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LIKEThis is your story you can change whatever you want. The Potter verse is not really complete it has been expanded but it's not yet completely explored, you can use that to your advantage by expanding more upon the world
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