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Pop0
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I will shamelessly give my fic a 5-star rating, because, why not? Anyway, I'm still a newbie in pretty much every aspect, but I'll try my best to create the fic I pictured in my mind. It will be rough around some parts, but I hope we enjoy reading it. There will be a major plot point regarding the cycles ( it will be easy to figure out what that plot point is, as I will be dropping hints here and there), but I don't plan on making much content with that part. It will be a harem, with Liara, Shepard, and Tali on it. I don't know if I will add others, but for now, that's it. I'll try my best to give all companions from the game their screen time, but I can't promise it will be good or that I will manage to do it. We will see how that goes. 2 Chapters a week, one on Wednesday and one on Saturday. Thanks for the support and I hope you guys enjoyed reading as much as I enjoyed writing it.

Time Effect ( A Mass Effect Fanfiction)

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Kurosis
KurosisLv4Kurosis

Don’t listen to any comment I wanna see the full picture you have going on in your head

MARLENE_ANGEL
MARLENE_ANGELLv1MARLENE_ANGEL

AUTHOR THANK YOU FOR THE NEW MASS EFFECT NOVLE THEIR NOT MANY IN HERE LIKE YOURS,,I HOPE IN THE FUTURE YOU MAKE MORE MASS EFFECT NOVELS...I HOPE IN THE FUTURE YOU MAKE MASS EFFECT NOVELS CENTERED AROUND LIARA BEING REINCARNATION BECAUSE THERE ARE NO EFFECT NOVELS CENTERED AROUND LIARA MIEN'S FAVORITE BLUE ALIEN BABE..THANK YOU

_leonid_
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author, how about MC traveled on ship to Dragon Age planet? will be pretty interesting , bc they are in the same universe in dragon Age inquisition u can see 2 heads of Krogans at a castle...

Gamer_Otaku448879
Gamer_Otaku448879Lv13Gamer_Otaku448879

Put Miranda in the harem !!

Psan
PsanLv5Psan

Sup author... i read up t9 the current chapter 27... it was a really really good read.... but, you have an complete lack of world building and also complete lack of surroundings and characters physical descriptions. I enjoyed the read only because i played the games and i know what everything looks like. You dont explain much at all about many stuff. A person who hasnt played the games will not understand a thing. Lets add WHAT YOU NEED TO improve first. Add descriptions of the surroundings, the places mc goes and describe them properly so that readers can get the picture and this goes for characters too... you havent added even 1 physical description of ANY character and thats really bad. You mention all the races but you dont describe what they look like, AT ALL... dude... we have absolutely no idea HOW even the protagonist looks like. No description of Veronica, John, RR, his mom, or shepard... and this needs to change. I would rate your novel as a whole... with a 7/10 at most. And i was generous.

Bulledar
BulledarLv13Bulledar

yup, as the saying goes show don't tell and so far he's been saying what has happened without describing the journey just various vague destinations and people

Psan:Sup author... i read up t9 the current chapter 27... it was a really really good read.... but, you have an complete lack of world building and also complete lack of surroundings and characters physical descriptions. I enjoyed the read only because i played the games and i know what everything looks like. You dont explain much at all about many stuff. A person who hasnt played the games will not understand a thing. Lets add WHAT YOU NEED TO improve first. Add descriptions of the surroundings, the places mc goes and describe them properly so that readers can get the picture and this goes for characters too... you havent added even 1 physical description of ANY character and thats really bad. You mention all the races but you dont describe what they look like, AT ALL... dude... we have absolutely no idea HOW even the protagonist looks like. No description of Veronica, John, RR, his mom, or shepard... and this needs to change. I would rate your novel as a whole... with a 7/10 at most. And i was generous.
Hasan_Shopnil
Hasan_ShopnilLv3Hasan_Shopnil

I ❤️ the Fic. Instead of Side Story give me the Next Chapter of Original Plot Continuity Pls.🙏 MC should Acquire Biotic Abilities. As,MC had both "(Miranda&Jack)" they both got their Biotic Abilities through Genetic Science&Bio-Engineering. Now,MC also got "Mordin";so with his help MC could Acquire Biotic Abilities Safely without any Side Effects. MC specially should send his Complete "(Serum)" Formula to Mordin for "Side Effects" Testing and then Perfecting the Serum.