Review Detail of Violet_Ivory in Lord of Business

This is a review based off of only the first 2 chapters. first off, there isnt much to comment on because of the lack of chapters right now. the grammar is off, there are words missing, use of words that just arent necessary or rather dont really work, but its not so horrendous that its barely legible. I cant really say much about the story, its pretty similar from the get-go to a lot of other things ive read. Although the same points are brought up multiple times. Its good that you included some antagonists who will be playing major roles and i also like the fact that youre including a little bit of your culture in the story.