Review Detail of ArtoriaPendragon_ in Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
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The story overall is pretty decent, but it has a major flaw that makes it hard for me to want to read. It’s overly descriptive, and by that I mean 99% of the chapters are descriptions about certain things. As well as Harry constantly thinking, which make sure fic a chore to read as it gets boring fast. It took like 15-16 chapters just for him to get the his first class at Hogwarts. And like 13-14 to actually get to Hogwarts itself. The other fanfic this author has suffers from this same problem, which is just a lot (and I mean a LOT) of descriptions, thinking, and world background without anything truly happening. Not to mention the fact that Harry seems like your cliche Emo/loner Mc who is always quiet and super smart and all that. Overall I might continue reading, but if it’s anything like their other fic (which was definitely worse than this one) I probably will not.
Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
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I read to like chapter 15-20, and it really doesn’t get better. The fact that 90% of each chapter Is just Harry thinking, or descriptions ruins the fanfic for me. The author just has an issue with being over descriptive, they have the same issue on all their other fanfics. And I doubt they will ever change this because they don’t really pay attention to any criticism.
Daoist_Dan:My advice is to skip right to chapter 7 as that's where he begins buying his stuff for school. No need to experience all the Dursley drama and bashing. Simply assume Harry gained his SI memories at some point and carry on.
what annoyed me the most is how he walked knowingly into avoidable situations. the forest of death for example, he knew voldemort was in there and he still enterd, like why? or when he was singled out by quirrel for his exams, he knew voldi was up to something and yet instead of using his cloak to hide, he just walked in.
Roktah:what annoyed me the most is how he walked knowingly into avoidable situations. the forest of death for example, he knew voldemort was in there and he still enterd, like why? or when he was singled out by quirrel for his exams, he knew voldi was up to something and yet instead of using his cloak to hide, he just walked in.image
I really didn't get far. Between the bashing, the world being built on so much headcanon, every background note the author made being used so it wouldn't go to waste, and the mc being a "cringe smart" that has him monologing his intelligence at people... Not a quality story. This would be my review.
ArtoriaPendragon_:I read to like chapter 15-20, and it really doesn’t get better. The fact that 90% of each chapter Is just Harry thinking, or descriptions ruins the fanfic for me. The author just has an issue with being over descriptive, they have the same issue on all their other fanfics. And I doubt they will ever change this because they don’t really pay attention to any criticism.
Daoist_Dan:I really didn't get far. Between the bashing, the world being built on so much headcanon, every background note the author made being used so it wouldn't go to waste, and the mc being a "cringe smart" that has him monologing his intelligence at people... Not a quality story. This would be my review.image
_Kioshi_Michio_:Apparently you have not seen such a novel as "War and Peace
