Review Detail of MisterEnd0821 in DesperateMeasures

I love the story very much, though the paragraphs are a bit long and the synopsis is slightly hard to understand. You just need to make it simpler of than your synopsis of yours and make your paragraphs short and that will be all, most of it is amazing and has great potential to be popular. Hoping to get more chapters when I go back, good job fellow novelist!