MisterEnd
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I only read the prologue so far but I know something will be interesting the more I read them. It has this vibe that you want to know more just by expressing on how they move and gesture. The World Background is good and the writing quality is great. I do hope the writer will make more chapters in order for me to understand and get away from the real world just by reading and imagining and pretending I'm the protagonist. Nice job!
From what I've read so far from chapter 1, I have to say it is a well written story. But small mistakes from those details derailed me from focusing. Like first you should fix whether it is first person pov or second person pov. And the first words from the paragraphs has lowered cases, try not to repeat this habit. But so far the writing quality and the world background is superb. The story is great and I do hope you learned more enough for me to take some samples of your writing quality. Good Job 👍
That's a well written chapter.
Your essay or Their essay?
Add a apostrophe in this statement if this is what Y/N said
Capitalized at the beginning
Never put first person pov and second person pov together, just put Y/N.
Also this, you should choose whether it is a first person or second person pov
You should add some prepositions like as or whereas like that at the start of this paragraph. I just don't tend to put lowercase at beginning of the paragraph.
Uhmmm the 9th and 10th paragraph is the same. Remove it at once
Shameless author here, just gonna rate my story. About how the potential of my story foretells, it has the fantasy of meeting ones' imagination. Characters from the story merges and jumps to the land of the gods if they may say. Hoping I could get more positive reviews and soon this story will flourish one day. Thanks for reading!
I love how it turned out, a classic dungeons and dragons. I love how the vibe of the story makes a RPG game. The writing quality was clean and the world background is magnificent. Hopefully, the author would write more chapters and less than 1500 words so that the reader would read it just fine. For now this is my rating. Good luck fellow novelist!