Review Detail of WriterTheos in Versatile System Online

A very very good first chapter so I honestly dont have much to say about it but there's some flaws. First, you shouldn't tell the readers how the mc is feeling. Like "he was happy". This is quite shallow and bad writing, instead, you should describe the bright smile on his face as he walked with his chin up and got clothed while humming a cheerful tune. Or atleast describe how he was happy instead of just saying it outright. Next, we didn't really get to understand who the mc really was. A lot of the chapter was spent on other things such as history and the world, and how the mc interacted as well. However, we didn't get to see his true motions and his ambition. I would have liked to see more of that as it is crucial in developing a connection between reader and mc. other stuff can be metioned in second chap in my opinion. However, overall it's still surprisingly good in a good way!