Review Detail of bald_daoist in Online In Another World
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Writing quality seems ok. I did not notice any granmar error for those grammar police. Nature of the story is also interesting for me, I kinda like it. My problem is the pace of the story. It’s really slow for me. Travelling to guild foundation is more or less 100 chapters. Once they arrived, i assume there’s another more or less 100 chapters just for him to become an adventurer. Yes. That’s right. So as of chapter 250 plus, it’s still an adventurer examination. I sure hope that at chapter 300, the exam is already over.
Online In Another World
DelzGB
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I’d like to add on to this review specifically in regards to the topIc of pacing. This is at its core an adventure story; beyond overarching goals, the purpose is the journey, not always the destination. I prioritize world-building and character development over creating a concise narrative that could be rushed through. I just think it’s to remember that this is a story about Emilio’s life; you will ride along with him on that journey. So, I wouldn’t recommend my own story for anybody that wants a fast-paced story that beelines from Point A to B; that’s not this story.
DelzGB:I’d like to add on to this review specifically in regards to the topIc of pacing. This is at its core an adventure story; beyond overarching goals, the purpose is the journey, not always the destination. I prioritize world-building and character development over creating a concise narrative that could be rushed through. I just think it’s to remember that this is a story about Emilio’s life; you will ride along with him on that journey. So, I wouldn’t recommend my own story for anybody that wants a fast-paced story that beelines from Point A to B; that’s not this story.
? Because the story isn’t about the trial. What happens on the journey to Vasmoria is much more important than simply becoming certified.
Mr_Babbles:he said 250 chapters and it's still a adventure EXAMINATION, how?
DelzGB:? Because the story isn’t about the trial. What happens on the journey to Vasmoria is much more important than simply becoming certified.