Review Detail of kickyx in Re: Quest Supremacy (Webtoon Amalgam Fanfic)
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Writing Quality - Some flow issues here and there. There's also a couple grammar issues throughout every chapter but its tolerable. 2/5 Stability of Updates - Pretty bad... there's 10 chapters and this has been out for 9 days... Even though it's 1 chapter a day, when it hasnt even hit the 25 chapter mark, you should have at least 2 chapters out a day. 3/5 Story Development - Too unrealistic. The system just straight up hands him things, the quests difficulty aren't relative to the rewards. You say you made this fan fic because you thought the system gavee the original MC "useless cards". But none of the cards given were useless, they're all used in some way or another that gives the original MC a advantage. You simply give your MC op cards for a power up with no creativity at all, no ingenuity to make it different from other system novels... Finally, the worst thing is that there's absolutely no explanations on how anything even happened. 1/5. Character Design - The character interactions all feel extremely fake and unrealistic. Not only that but what type of monster feels absolutely no sorrow or guilt for taking over someones body and transmigating? The guy just died and he isnt relieved that he managed to reincarnate or sad that he left his family or anything, all he's thinking is "wow this body is so much better than the manwhas body haha so fun, lets go lie to the dead body's sisters face!" Also, the MC has no personality, he's staler than 30 year old bread, the school and characters in Supremacy Quest was built around the fact that the MC was goofy, so it all flowed well. Here, it just looks super awkward and trash. The worst thing though is that no one doubts or thinks anything when the MC's appereance undergoes a COMPLETE change in a WEEK. (The Mc went from the original manwha appereance to the book cover... NOT SIMILAR AT ALL, THATS NOT HOW GROWTH OR PUBERTY WORKS...) 1/5, if i could, i would give it a 0/5. World Background - Complete garbage. The author clearly has no clue as to what type of universe Quest Supremacy is in. (It's part of a whole webtoon universe, it all ties together and eventually they all meet up. Manager Kim and Lookism is an example.) The Author has completely messed up the laws of both the world and universe the story takes place, completely cutting off any routes for the MC to take, and essentially making it a 100% chance of this novel getting dropped. Again, 1/5 but if i could, 0/5.
Re: Quest Supremacy (Webtoon Amalgam Fanfic)
The_Kim_Soohyun
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it’s not personal and i’m not that big a fan, i review pretty much everything in this format you can just go thru my profile. Also, your story is still good, just not my cup of tea.
The_Kim_Soohyun:Grammar? Yeah, I ain't perfect and I make mistakes. But is a couple of grammar issues and flow issues worthy of a 2/5? That's incredibly harsh. Story Development? Eh, if you don't like OP protagonists and instead want a wimpy twerp who can't do anything, just say so. Jokes aside, I get where you're coming from but it's entirely subjective. I like it when MCs get strong quick and you obviously don't, so there's no need to argue over this point. Character Design? I based all the conversations off of the original webtoon, so maybe you should go have a chat with that author, not me. Besides, I think you're confused. The protagonist IS Kim Soohyun. He didn't just take over his body. He gained his memories, his emotions, his connections to his family and friends. The reason he's not upset over dying is because he's partly Kim Soohyun, the dude who literally just came back to life after being strangled out by his bully. Also, even if he had taken over Kim Soohyun's body...why would he feel sorrow or guilt? The Kim Soohyun in this story died. That's how the MC's memories and soul entered the body and merged with the original. Why would he feel guilt or sorrow for entering an empty body? But you know the one thing I absolutely can't agree with? That the Update Stability is bad. I've been putting out a chapter a day, bro. Not to mention that each chapter is above 3k words and usually around 4k or 5k words. That's much better than the 1k words you did at the start of your current book, mate. If I did 1-2k words per chapter, I'd have between 19 and 37 chapters out by now. So nearly half of the chapters you've got out in four months time if we went with 1k word chapters. But okay bro. Nice review. A bit weird how personal you're taking my fanfic (are you the original author of Quest Supremacy or something?) but I guess you're just a pretty die hard fan of the original, so it's cool. Thanks for taking your time to write it! :)image
Grammar? Yeah, I ain't perfect and I make mistakes. But is a couple of grammar issues and flow issues worthy of a 2/5? That's incredibly harsh. Story Development? Eh, if you don't like OP protagonists and instead want a wimpy twerp who can't do anything, just say so. Jokes aside, I get where you're coming from but it's entirely subjective. I like it when MCs get strong quick and you obviously don't, so there's no need to argue over this point. Character Design? I based all the conversations off of the original webtoon, so maybe you should go have a chat with that author, not me. Besides, I think you're confused. The protagonist IS Kim Soohyun. He didn't just take over his body. He gained his memories, his emotions, his connections to his family and friends. The reason he's not upset over dying is because he's partly Kim Soohyun, the dude who literally just came back to life after being strangled out by his bully. Also, even if he had taken over Kim Soohyun's body...why would he feel sorrow or guilt? The Kim Soohyun in this story died. That's how the MC's memories and soul entered the body and merged with the original. Why would he feel guilt or sorrow for entering an empty body? But you know the one thing I absolutely can't agree with? That the Update Stability is bad. I've been putting out a chapter a day, bro. Not to mention that each chapter is above 3k words and usually around 4k or 5k words. That's much better than the 1k words you did at the start of your current book, mate. If I did 1-2k words per chapter, I'd have between 19 and 37 chapters out by now. So nearly half of the chapters you've got out in four months time if we went with 1k word chapters. But okay bro. Nice review. A bit weird how personal you're taking my fanfic (are you the original author of Quest Supremacy or something?) but I guess you're just a pretty die hard fan of the original, so it's cool. Thanks for taking your time to write it! :)
The_Kim_Soohyun:Grammar? Yeah, I ain't perfect and I make mistakes. But is a couple of grammar issues and flow issues worthy of a 2/5? That's incredibly harsh. Story Development? Eh, if you don't like OP protagonists and instead want a wimpy twerp who can't do anything, just say so. Jokes aside, I get where you're coming from but it's entirely subjective. I like it when MCs get strong quick and you obviously don't, so there's no need to argue over this point. Character Design? I based all the conversations off of the original webtoon, so maybe you should go have a chat with that author, not me. Besides, I think you're confused. The protagonist IS Kim Soohyun. He didn't just take over his body. He gained his memories, his emotions, his connections to his family and friends. The reason he's not upset over dying is because he's partly Kim Soohyun, the dude who literally just came back to life after being strangled out by his bully. Also, even if he had taken over Kim Soohyun's body...why would he feel sorrow or guilt? The Kim Soohyun in this story died. That's how the MC's memories and soul entered the body and merged with the original. Why would he feel guilt or sorrow for entering an empty body? But you know the one thing I absolutely can't agree with? That the Update Stability is bad. I've been putting out a chapter a day, bro. Not to mention that each chapter is above 3k words and usually around 4k or 5k words. That's much better than the 1k words you did at the start of your current book, mate. If I did 1-2k words per chapter, I'd have between 19 and 37 chapters out by now. So nearly half of the chapters you've got out in four months time if we went with 1k word chapters. But okay bro. Nice review. A bit weird how personal you're taking my fanfic (are you the original author of Quest Supremacy or something?) but I guess you're just a pretty die hard fan of the original, so it's cool. Thanks for taking your time to write it! :)image